See What Happens When You Won’t Play Tag With A Hobo

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Nobody plays with me here.

It was fun for a while. I told matter to be friendly, to stay close to other matter. When lots of it got together, it sang brightly.

I found a few billion New Ones huddled on a cold ball. They were smart, for New’s.

“Hi!” I said. “I made this place! Play with me!”

They shoved and sneered at me. I saw that it had been that way for a while, even though their sky was bright with song. I saw that they had forgotten they lived in a beautiful place. Or didn’t care.

They weren’t interested in singing, only screaming. They didn’t want to play, they just wanted to forge ahead, and on and on and on, busy and suffering and making sure others suffered. No one would tell me why.

Maybe I got it wrong at first. I wonder what’ll happen if I tell matter to stay away from matter. I don’t know if it’ll be friendlier than this place, but I know it will be beautiful.

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I don’t know if this captures everything I put in the above story, but here’s the current try.

‘See What Happens’

by Robert Gryfft

Nobody plays with me here.

I found a few billion souls huddled on a cold ball.

“Hi!” I said. “I made this place! Let’s play!”

They sneered at me, though their sky was bright with my starsong.

I’ll try again; I’ll tell matter to stay away from matter. I don’t know if it’ll be friendlier, but it’ll be beautiful.

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4 Responses to “See What Happens When You Won’t Play Tag With A Hobo”

  1. aricollins Says:

    Just wanted to say that I think the 55 is better. As is often the case.

    Hopefully I’ll get to the forum later today and add some thoughts.

  2. gryfft Says:

    Hilariously, piratelibrarian disagrees.

  3. aricollins Says:

    Yeah, she was talking about it last night a little. Said that you thought the idea couldn’t fit in 55 words. Said what you told her was behind the story was much more interesting. What idea was that?

  4. gryfft Says:

    In the story, God is basically a kid standing at the lightswitches that control the laws of physics. The idea is that particles, strings, whatever the universe is made of, follow certain rules arbitrarily (after all, we still have no unified theory of physics that explains exactly why the hell gravity exists.) In the story, the character basically told matter to be ‘friendly’- to tend to gravitate. Hence, our universe.

    He plays with matter for a while, watches some of it ‘sing,’ (stars and fusion) then goes to play with the locals (a random planet, presumably ours.)

    They’re not interested in playing, so he decides maybe ungravity will make a better universe. He tells matter to stay away from matter, and the universe explodes. Or rather, takes a different form. It wouldn’t just be a random explosion, matter would behave differently. And maybe whatever evolved from THAT would play with him.

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