6th and Perhaps Final Draft of 55, Now with Title!


And much better now, I think. But what do you guys think?

How Can I Miss You When You Won’t Go Away?
by Ari Collins

The T wasn’t running anymore when I finally gave up arguing your break-up rationales. One last sleepover meant maybe a noisy goodbye fuck, but I got instead noisy snores. I was trying to spoon your greater height/length when pre-nostalgia hit me. I already missed all your little habits. I missed even your snores.

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4 Responses to “6th and Perhaps Final Draft of 55, Now with Title!”

  1. annoying Says:

    Nice! And I count 55 words this time. I like the title, too. But don’t you have a rule about the number of words in the title?

  2. aricollins Says:

    Man, I forgot about my own rule. Too bad, I like that title.

    I’ll have to come up with something else, I guess.

    “I Miss Missing You”? “I Can’t Wait to Miss You”? “Looking Forward to Looking Backward”? “I Don’t Even Have Sympathy for Myself”? “Why Am I Always Trying to Come up with a Clever Title”?

  3. annoying Says:

    I think I’ve seen a couple on the site the are longer then they’re supposed to be. I figured you let them through because they didn’t break the spirit of the rule. So, take that in consideration when you decide what to do about the title.

    Another idea, “Can’t Miss You ‘Cause You’re Still Here”. And I totally understand the clever title thing.

  4. annoying Says:

    I see you settled on a title and posted it. And it was pretty clever, too.

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